Thursday, February 05, 2009

My latest story ... the promised exerpt!

I promised that once I had something worth sharing, I'd share.
This is the latest idea that's drifted into my head and anchored itself in my thoughts.
For anyone who's read the exerpts from my last story, don't worry. I am still working on it. It's not going to fall by the wayside!

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Everyone had tried to talk her out of making the trip to the cabin, but the more they talked, the more determined she was to go. Even though she was only a few weeks away from her due date, she just had to get out of the city. She needed rest, and she needed peace, and she wasn't going to get either surrounded by a city full of concrete and steel. The cabin was the only place that she'd ever really felt at peace, and she needed that right now even more than she needed sleep. She finished her last day of work, left a few voice messages telling people where she was going, and then she climbed into the car.
By the time she made it out to the lake, the sun was only a few hours from setting. The cabin was stuffy from being closed up, and overheated from the long day under the summer sun. She'd opened the windows, but it wasn't until she was getting ready for bed that she remembered to turn on the air conditioner.
The air conditioner was little and old, and down in the kitchen. It couldn't cool the cabin very quickly, and the bedrooms upstairs were always the last to benefit. About an hour before midnight, after tossing and turning for what felt like forever, she'd finally gotten dressed again and gone out to sit by the water. The breeze off the lake was cool, the sound of the waves lapping the shore was soothing, almost hypnotizing, and the moonlight was a pale, silvery glow. Within minutes, she was sleeping deeply in the grass.
As the old mantle clock in the cabin struck one, she still lay sleeping, sprawled on the ground at the edge of the lake, her heavy, pregnant body an untidy heap in the long grass. Her flowing white blouse and pale, faded blue jeans almost seemed to glow in the moonlight, and the tiny, multi-colored crystals threaded into her long black hair glimmered like a rainbow of stars. Her eyes were closed and her chest rose and fell in the regular rhythm of sleep.

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1 comment:

RL said...

The feeling that something is about to happen to her is SO tantalizing here. I can taste the harbinger of foreshadowing. More please.